Please do not copy the diary entries. They belong to the author, I would not be sharing any of them if I did not purposefully comment and respond to almost every other sentence. And FYI STARTING AT P9 of the annotation the book is not for the age group below high-school as there are really dark stuff coming up. Unless you use it as a model to write your own example of annotation or a challenging writing prompt to follow NEVER COPY IT EVER. I will never put this book in stores or on another website either. This is a solo Wattpad story only and only exists for the convenience of those who wish to catch onto several writing skills and practiced them, Skylights, when they have no resources to use and accessibly provide themselves off line. I don't want any money for it and I don't want popularity for it. It is just a simple gift to less fortunate than me and to me them being able to read this is satisfying enough. It is enough for me that readers will want to read it.
You, however, may quote whatever annotations I have stated that you find make a very good lesson and point I will allow that. I quote people all the time. And I will be listing several quotes from the story in these chapters to come up later because they are really good to quote, my friends.
5th diary entry Annotated
Next day
I just wrote T-R-E-E. (4 words within sentence) I see my tree — the live oak behind the kitchen where I come to write whenever I can slip away. (19 words in this former sentence. Oak trees also resemble strong endurance. It is why they are called sturdy so often, Skylights and it is a dwarf's favored tree too as well.) I put a "s" on tree and the word is trees.(11 words in the preceding sentence)
The picture in my head turns to the apple orchards. In spring, the apple trees are filled with bright, white blossoms. (11 words within the former sentence, white blossoms on the apple trees are really underestimated flower both in scent and their beauty.)
I close my eyes and see the same trees in the green of summer, and full of good-tastin' apples in the fall. (22 words with last sentence. Hyphenated words count as one word usually the only time they don't is when spelling a word that is long enough to run off the mar-gin there is your example for that, precious Skylights. Apples get way too bad of reputation in movie media. So it is nice to look back on old stories and have fictional characters praise the healthy fruit. I don't buy all that stupid doctor crap where they say too much fruit is bad for you. The French don't either and all their food in their country comes out of local produce which is better than a lot of whst stores and cultures do.) I love playin' with words — puttin' letters in and takin' letters out and lettin' the pictures change. (17 words within the former sentence, you ever tried word games where you challenge yourself to make other words from the letters of other words, Skylights?)
6th diary entry
Monday
I know it's Monday, 'cause Miz Lilly comes to the kitchen every Monday mornin' to pass out the flour, sugar and meal. (23 words within sentence, She means corn meal. People never referred to their actual meals as a meal but rather by supper or dinner. The words "Lunch" and "Breakfast" were hardly mentioned in history very much certainly not in the U. S. )
It's so hard keepin' secrets from the people I live with. (11 words within sentence)
Sometimes when I'm helpin' Aunt Tee in the kitchen, I want to tell her 'bout my learnin' so bad. (19 words within last sentence, Skylights.)
But I cain't, even though she's bout the closest thing to a mama I got since my own mama died five years ago. (23 words within the sentence, so we learn here our fictional main character Clotee no longer has her Mother in her life, Skylights.) I don't think she'd do a thing to hurt me, but she been real close with Mas' Henley all his life. (21 words within previous sentence) Been his cook — since before he got married to Miz Lilly. (11 words within sentence. So that tells us something we didn't know about Henley before. He's a younger man than what you might have thought a little bit before, precious dear Skylights.) Cain't take the chance. (4 words within an earlier sentence)
I want to tell Uncle Heb how I used his whittlin' knife to make a writing pen out of a turkey quill. (22 words last sentence and so that's how quill pens were made by whittlin' at the feather, who knew that was how it down back then?) He'd be right proud of his Sunflower Girl, that's what he calls me. (13 words within sentence, and oh, the nickname is so charming from her old gentlemen friend, isn't it?) But he's old now, forgetful. (5 words within previous sentence) He might just slip up and tell the wrong person, who'd tell Mas' Henley on me just to win a favor. (21 words in last sentence, and according to Clotee plenty of people on the plantation want to make it a race to get favors from the Mas' but I'd like to point she never says exactly who those people might be and we honestly don't need to know.) (Already you realized by now how tense she feels as she is writing all this down, Skylights, I can imagine how shaky her nervous hands must have been and my phone knows too because as I write this my iphone won't stop shaking either despite the fact that my hands are bein super steady, friends.)
What I wouldn't give to tell Hince how, whilst I'm dustin', I slip ink out of Mas' Henley's study in a glass bottle. (23 words within sentence and wow, that's quite gutsy.)
I can see him laughin' so his eyes would water up. (11 words within previous last sentence)
If Mama was alive I could tell her. (8 words within last sentence) But Mama is gone, gone forever. (6 words within that sentence) Dead.
So there's nobody I trust enough to tell. (8 words within the previous sentence) (Beware next chapters might have some tense nightmare paragraphs and I'm five chapters away from my half point of Chapter 100 in my writing advice book which is what you are reading now and 1 chapters away from Chapter 180 in My Brothers' Grimm Book Tales Reviewed reference project which consists of mostly annotations within on the stories I shared earlier per chapter, Skylights.)
7th Diary entry
Two days later
It aine even summer yet, and William is fussin' 'bout the heat. (12 words in the sentence, my goodness, lol, this is a random coincidence that the sentence tells both young characters are only 12 years old and the first sentence of this diary entry is twelve words long, absolutely hilarious) I am 12 and he is, too. (7 words within the sentence)
But he seems so much younger. (6 words within last sentence) Maybe it's 'cause William is forever whinin' 'bout something — specially at study time. (13 words within the last sentence)(Boy youngsters from toddler up to their preteens do lots of intense silly whining and fussing about lots of things.) I just stay quiet and listen, fannin' — up and down, up and down. (13 words within sentence) Aunt Tee say William is spoiled to a stink. (9 words within sentence) Mas' Henley thinks his son is a piece of heaven here on earth. (13 words within sentence, true many white men in the U. S history back in the day craved a boy while woman could handle girls and so girls were looked down upon by the men of our existing societies within the past history of the U. S., Skylights.) 'Course, nobody else shares that notion, not even the boy's mama. (11 words within sentence)(There were times when white women gave the responsibility of their sons right into the hands of their husbands, because they were probably fed up with trying to correct spoiled behavior that would never end because the Father of the house wouldn't allow it, Skylights, my bestest fellow writing friends.)
8th Diary entry
Next Day
There's goin' to be a dinner party in the Big House tonight. (12 words within sentence.) Aunt Tee sent me down to the Quarters to get Aggie and Eva Mae to help out in the kitchen. (20 words within sentence) (If you need that much help I'm sure it was a big party and me I don't do good at big social parties so I can imagine what it is like to be forced to wait on people involved in such big parties gets tiresome for anybody even the host rather quickly.)
Whenever I write F-R-I-E-N-D, I always put a "s" on it, 'cause I have two friends — Eva Mae's daughter, Missy. (20 words within sentence) She's fifteen. (2 words within sentence) And Aggie's daughter, Wook. (4 words with sentence)
She's sixteen. (2 words within sentence, the only friends Clotee has on are not her same age group so they're close friends but not anywhere near best friends even if Clotee's known them her whole life she has been involved as a slave on this plantation.)(Our main character's word has expanded for us. Let's hope it will keep on expanding as we continue.)
They all growed up now, but we still be friends. (10 words within sentence. You can many friends across many different ages that may not be your own. It is not a required that you must make friends with those only in your age groups. It is a stupid lie our brains feed us on a daily basis. My sister who I live with the same house still believes this deep down in her heart and this is the reason why we don't get along most of the time. She doesn't love me the way she loves the friends of her past and every time her excuse to not go somewhere is to say, "'But they're not in my age group so I don't want to go do that anymore.'") Known them all my life. (5 words within a sentence) Cain't even remember a time when I didn't know them. (10 words within the sentence)
I've always been a little jealous 'cause Wook and Missy be closer to each other than they's to me. (19 words within the previous sentence) And they each got their mamas with them. (8 words within sentence, always touch luck to be the first to lose your Mama.) Missy's daddy was Mas' Henley's best jocket, but he was throwed from his horse and killed a year or so back. (21 words within the sentence and whoa that's even more tough luck, too.) Now Hince do all the ridin'. (6 words within super duper brave especially when you aren't riding on your terms and risks.) Eva Mae is still grievin' and Missy misses her daddy much as I miss my mama. (16 words within sentence. While these two might not be close they do have excellent common ground that allows them to get along reasonably.)
Wook is lucky to have a daddy like Rufus. (9 words within sentence) Anybody who knows Rufus and Aggie likes them. (8 words within the former sentence) Rufus came to Belmont 'bout two years ago from over in Hampton. (12 words within sentence) He's a strong man, big, but not fat — not tall either. (11 words within, so grateful she didn't describe him as fat, that's the only stupid picture we get in today's overwhelming media and it's annoying let Blacks have more characteristics in their bodies other than keeping their body builds be fat, strong and big. These three words are so generic and placid, my fellow Wattpad writers.)
Uncle Heb says he's a God-fearin' man. (7 words with sentence) Mas' must have seen that Rufus was a natural born leader, so made Rufus the field boss. (17 words within the previous sentence)
A lot of woman had their eyes on Rufus when he came, but he married Aggie, a big fine woman who had a daughter, but Rufus took Wook to be his very own daughter. (34 words within sentence. Rufus is a decent and loving young black man willing enough to marry a widowed woman and take her daughter in as his own child so much better love and care then the white fathers of my U. S that have been studied one exception to this rule is George Washington our first president while he had slaves he never mistreated them while he was with them.)
Aggie is goin' to have a baby real soon. (9 words within the sentence) Aunt Tee is the plantation midwife — birthed Hince, Wook, Missy and even birthed me. (14 words within sentence)She look out after all the 'spectin' women. (8 words within sentence)She's showed me the secrets to all her medicine recipes, but she will not let me go to a birthin' with her. (22 words within the previous sentence) I want to know 'bout such things, but Aunt Tee say, it's not for me. (15 words within the previous sentence) How do she know it's not for me, if she aine never let me go? (15 words within sentence) (So Aunt Tee's been on this plantation for quite a long time, and she not only has kitchen duties, but tending to the sick and also being a proper midwife to the women on the plantation who marry and then have to give birth such a rough job.)
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